Write What Comes

In AWA workshops facilitators are trained to encourage participants to write what comes. Sometimes I’ll notice a writer cringe or look startled after contemplating the prompt. That’s my queue to gently remind them that, “What you write today is what you’re supposed to write.”
A few weeks ago, I had to swallow my own medicine. It was bitter, and I had to fight like hell to keep it down.
The prompt was: Begin with a twinkle in someone’s eye.
I imagined I’d see a kind, elderly old man, or a cherub like child smiling and ready to tell his or her story of love, happiness and butterflies. Nope. What came surprised and frightened me. In our 25 minute writing period, I had to fight with this man who would not go away. So, I took my own advice and gave in.


He hated when she looked at him that way; dark grey eyes twinkling with the beginnings of tears. Tears that would puddle in the corner of her eyes, and then slide down the sides of her face. She never sobbed or wailed or whimpered. She was the calmest crier he had ever known. After he finished, after his last blow, he would step back, dazed with anger and rage, mad more at himself, and unable to remember what had set him off. This time.

She, his wife, would look up at him and not utter a word. He would later swear to himself that sometimes she looked like she was begging him for more. But he knew that couldn’t be true. So he would keep staring, his chest heaving up and down, his fists clinched. He never knew what else to do.

His mother; now that was a woman who knew how to put up a fight. When his pop came at her, usually after a night of drinking and god-knows-what, his mom would pick up the nearest frying pan, broom stick, shoe, or whatever she could get her hands on and defend herself.
“Get away from me you sonofabitch!”
Pop usually got it as bad as Ma, both of them waking up the next day with bruises, scratches and sore throats from all the yelling they done.

Love is a fight and you do hurt the ones you love. He learned that early. He needed to teach his wife that same lesson.
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This is a first draft and, if you asked me today, I would tell you it’s the last draft too. I have no desire to come back to this story, this monster. But, I suspect, he will appear in another story, or as I continue work on my second novel. Since I confronted him this time, I think I’ll be better prepared to deal with him—or someone like him—next time.

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Sucking Lemons; A short story Part II

I saw a bumper sticker that said, “If I had known grandchildren were so much fun, I would have had them first.  I could have written that. Within two months I had revived my role as chief cook, cleaner, and chauffeur of the Dupree household. I bitched a lot about it but I really kinda enjoyed it. Allison was a hell of a lot more fun than Liz ever was. That little girl knows how to have a good time, and since her mom was up to her eyeballs in work, I got to spend a lot of time with my granddaughter. I knew all her school friends, her teachers, and I was the one that did most of the mandatory volunteer hours at the school. I usually worked in the office answering the phone or stuffing envelopes. They let me smoke in there.

At first Al liked the school, but as soon as she started thinking for herself, the religious stuff began to turn her off. She always got As and Bs in all her subjects, except religion. Her essays in those classes were what the sisters called sarcastic and border line blasphemous. I would have to sign each one she scored less than a B on, so I got to read the more offensive ones. I thought they were great. Before she started the ninth grade, Allison begged her mother to let her go to the local high school, but Liz wouldn’t budge. Even Dirk couldn’t persuade her.

Even though keeping Allison in that school but a big stress on my daughter, she kept it up. It was a sacrifice she said she was willing to make so that her daughter could have a good, solid education. She kept throwing in that word “solid,” not really knowing what it meant. Who does? And that’s something Elizabeth should have looked into before giving that school all her money because as it turned out, everyone had their own special definition of “solid.” For St. Cornelius it meant strong Catholic morals, a lot of scripture readings, and a couple sets of rosary beads she’ll never use again. For Allison it meant learning how to make major life decisions on her own, and then sticking to them. I think Elizabeth was hoping that the church’s homophobic scare tactics would turn Allison away from her dad, or at least keep her loyal to her mother. From the way things all turned out, I’m surprised my daughter didn’t demand all her money back from those people.

Two hours before Allison’s graduation ceremony, my daughter tore inside the house like she was being chased by cannibals. She whisked through the living room, and dropped her work blazer, keys, and purse on the coffee table on her way to her bedroom. The look she had told me to keep quiet, so I did. My newly polished nails needed blowing, so I used my mouth to do that instead.

While she was fussing around in the bathroom, I took a look through Allison’s yearbook some more. She had left it on the kitchen table, and I glanced through it after everyone had left that morning. At first I was only interested in seeing her senior photo, but after reading one of the notes her classmates wrote, I was sucked into reading all of them. When I finished, I realized that unless all those kids were lying or playing some sort of group prank, my daughter was in for a big surprise. And not an “Oh, you shouldn’t have” type of surprise. This was more of a “How the hell can you do this to me?” type of surprise. It wasn’t going to be pretty.

After I heard Liz mutter a few curse words—most likely at her hair—I decided to tell her what I had found, thinking giving her a heads up would avoid a public scene later. Elizabeth hates those more than anything.

She opened the bathroom door just as I was about to knock. Before I could show her the yearbook, she made some smart remark about my not being ready. “I just have to change my shirt,” I said.

She acted like she didn’t hear me and kept on about how getting ready was the only thing I had to do and that it wasn’t too much to ask of me.

“I told you I was ready,” I said again, and she gave me a once-over that was more than a little bit disapproving. Before she could comment I said, “For goodness sake, it’s a graduation, not the Academy Awards, and besides, if you had just let me take Al to the stadium, you wouldn’t be rushing around and yelling at me.”

“I wasn’t yelling.” She knew I was right, but she would never admit it. She crossed her arms and said, “We’re not going to the Bingo parlor, Mother. Don’t you have a nicer pair of pants? That polyester will snag on those wooden benches.”

She loved attacking my choice of clothes. When she was a kid she said I dressed too racy. My skirts were always too short and my necklines too deep. After I hit 55, and things started to sag and jiggle too much, I switched to slacks and tops, mostly from Sears. “I’m not changing, so just get over it,” I told her. I held out the yearbook. “Besides, you have more important things to worry about right now.”

She turned back to face me. “There is nothing more important than this, Mother. Allison and I have been working very hard for this day, and nothing is going to ruin it. Do you understand?”

“I’m not trying to ruin anything. I’m trying to show you something important, and you had better calm down and take a look at it.” I put the open book in her hands and told her to read what Allison’s friends had written on the pages.

She tried to give the book back to me. She said, “Mom, kids do that. It’s just their way of saying congratulations and good luck or whatever.”

“I know that, Elizabeth. I’m not stupid. It’s what they wrote I want you to read.”
Then she looked shocked. It was what I call her Scarlet O’Hara look that she had perfected when she was in the sixth grade, after watching that movie about 20 times. “Mother, are you asking me to invade Allison’s privacy?”

“Well, from what I read, it’s only private to us. Seems like everyone in Atlanta knows what that girl is up to, except us.”

“What do you mean, up to?”

She was being stubborn, so I just said it. “I mean up to her big secret plan to move to Seattle. That’s what all these kids wrote about.”

She finally took the yearbook and read. Her forehead scrunch together as her mind starting working over the stuff she was reading. When she finished, her lips puckered together so tight anyone would think she had been born that way.

“This doesn’t mean anything, she said. “They’re just a bunch of kids.”

“A bunch of kids who all wrote the same thing?” I asked her. I took the book and read some of the more obvious ones aloud:

            Allison, I’m soooo jealous! I wish I could leave this dump town. Don’t forget to write!! 

            Lucky you!! Seattle is totally awesome! We’ll miss you lots.

            Atlanta will be lonely without you, Al. Take care and send pictures soon.

After I finished that last one I looked up at my daughter and asked her if she knew. As soon as the question passed my lips, I regretted it. She knew about as much as I did, which was probably the first time we had ever been on the same side of anything. I felt sort of close to her right then and thought that, together, we could fix this. The last thing I wanted my granddaughter to do was leave me; even if it was good for her.

“We should see her before the ceremony and talk.” I checked my watch. “If we leave now we can catch her.”

I stepped around her to get to my room so I could finish changing, but she grabbed my arm just as I was beside her, and told me that we were not going to talk to anyone. She said that she would handle it—alone. I wanted to protest, but the grip she had on my arm and the look on her faced stopped me—lips puckered into the tightest ball I’ve ever seen, eyes angry and blazing right at me. My heart jumped a bit and for a second, I didn’t recognize her. She looked like she wanted to rip my head off.  We’ve had some blows in the past, but that night was definitely different.

Instead of fighting back, I just calmly reached around, place my hand on her hand and pulled her off a me. My touching her like that must have brought her back from the edge because she relaxed her shoulders a bit and unpuckered those lips. I tucked the yearbook under my arm and walked to my room. I closed the door on her telling me to hurry up.

The tension between us during the drive was as thick as spoiled milk. It even rivaled the time she was pissed at me for not speaking out about Dirk. I sat beside her as she weaved in and out of traffic, cursing at any car that dared to get in her way. I kept my mouth clamped shut. I didn’t smoke either, even though I was dying for one. Liz, I knew, had morphed into her I’m just gonna ignore everything and it will be all right style of parenting. That’s how she’s been for a long time. Allison learned that about her mom at an early age, and for most of her life I had been the go-to person whenever she needed to talk things over. I mostly just listened, and maybe told her one or two of my own stories in a cautionary tale sort of way. Another big difference between Liz and me is that I know I’ve made mistakes. Liz still thinks she’s immune to them.

While she drove, I racked my brains for some hint or clue or something that maybe I’d overlooked or had forgotten. The only thing that came to mind was the time she gave me the nicotine patches, about a month earlier. She joked about how she wanted me to be around long enough to see my great-grandchildren.

“Well, how long is that going to be?” I asked her. She laughed it off, but I thought it was a good time to talk about her plans after high school. “You got accepted into the university, but I never heard anything about you agreeing to go.”

She answered that she hadn’t made up her mind yet. “There’s plenty of time,” she said. I didn’t really believe that but said nothing. So, since she mentioned children, I asked her about her social life in the most delicate way I knew how. “So, what’s with all this talk about great-grandbabies? You’re not…?”

She rolled her eyes that way teenagers do to show how stupid they think you are. “Oh, jeeze, Gram. No. Okay?”

“Well what was I supposed to think, Al? Here you come out of the blue talking about babies. What was I supposed to think?”

“Gram, I don’t even have a boyfriend. You know that.”

“Don’t need a boyfriend to get pregnant. Just a boy.” I lit a cigarette and took a deep inhale.  I said, “Look, if you need me to get you anything, you know, to protect you, just let me—”

“Know,” she cut me off. “Look, I just said grandchildren because I didn’t think you’d be so interested if I said my college graduation or something.”

That hurt. I don’t know why she and her mother think I don’t give a damn about all this schooling and stuff. I do. It was just that school that I objected to, not the entire educational system.

My feelings must have shown because she added, “Grandma, I just don’t know what’s going to happen after graduation, okay?”

“But your mom said you were going to the university. Is that not true? Does she know?”

She looked at me with the saddest face, and I thought she was confused and maybe even scared about leaving school and everything. But then she said, “No, Mom doesn’t know anything.”

She could have added, “and you don’t either,” but she didn’t. She left the house a few minutes later with some friends. At that time I just assumed the worst she was planning was passing on the university deal and maybe working somewhere. That alone would have sent Elizabeth into a full-blown fit. Me? I really didn’t care one way or another. The past 12 years with Allison had taught me that she was one resourceful girl. I knew she would land on her feet no matter what. I just didn’t think she felt she had to do it in another state.

 

When we finally pulled into the stadium parking lot, I looked at my daughter and tried to reason with her. “Let’s find Dirk and talk about this together. I’m sure the two of you can make Allison see that moving away would be a mistake right now.”

She got out of the car and started towards the stadium entrance. “I told you that I don’t want to talk about it tonight, okay?” she said. “There will be plenty of time to discuss it tomorrow, or the next day.”

“She could be gone by then,” I said, trying to keep up with her.

That stopped her and she turned and stared at me. “Don’t be so dramatic. Allison would not just leave me like that. I’m her mother and there is nothing that she can do in Seattle that she can’t do here.” She started to walk away again and then added, “What would be the point anyway? We don’t even know anyone in Seattle.”

It’s funny how sometimes you hear something and it causes your memory bank to crack open and flood your brain with all sorts of facts and names and dates you haven’t thought about in years. Her last sentence did that to me just then, and I wondered if it had been the same with her. I caught up with her and saw that she still had that same determined and stubborn look on her face. Liz can be a tough nut to crack sometimes. I looked around for a place we could go to talk and saw her ex-husband and his partner heading our way. And then I panicked. The pieces of this crazy puzzle were starting to come together and fall apart all at the same time. I held Elizabeth back with my hand on her arm and looked into her face. I wanted to warn her but I didn’t have the time or the place to break it to her gently, so I just said it: “Dirk has family there.”

* * *

I believe my daughter would have eventually made peace with Allison wanting to move away, but the kid blew any chance of that ever happening when she enlisted the help of her father and excluded her mother. She’s been gone almost six months now, and I wonder sometimes why she didn’t let me in on it. But my granddaughter is one smart girl, so I think she was trying to save her mother’s and my relationship. I’m really all my Elizabeth has, and if I had been one of Allison’s co-conspirators, Liz’s pride would have forced her to reject me too. Despite everything we’ve been through, Liz knows that I will always be there for her. Oh, I let her lay her problems at my door, say it’s all my fault because I didn’t love her enough or spend enough time with her. But she’s wrong. Problem was that I loved her too much and always gave in or just gave up when she was on one her stubborn streaks. I should have put my foot down despite her swearing she hated me and all those other mean things kids say. At least she would have learned to respect me a little bit. Now all I got is a disrespectful and angry kid.

So here we are; the two of us together again. She works 10-hour days, comes home to eat, sleep, and change clothes. I have my Bingo, the soaps, and a rowdy bunch of senior citizens to keep me company. I wonder if the irony of it all will ever come to her. For me? While I may not have ended up with the most perfect mother-daughter relationship, I at least had a good time and have good memories to show for it. Elizabeth? Well, she still walks around with a face that looks like it’s been sucking on lemons all day.

 

THE END

 

Thank you for reading. This is one of the first short stories I wrote and it has been through many, many drafts. The seed for this story was planted by a bit of family gossip I heard many years ago. There is one line of dialogue in Sucking Lemons that comes from a real- life conversation. The rest is completely made up.

 

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Tough, but true.

Tough, but true.

I just held a small workshop where the theme was: I need to get motivated! Everyone agreed that they had all these great ideas in their head, but getting them on the page was proving difficult. Someone even shared how an idea they had been musing over was “taken” by someone else and made into a movie. That’s happened to me too. (Sunshine Cleaning – that was MY idea!)
But I couldn’t hate the producers of that movie, no matter how much I wanted to. Great ideas do not belong to just the privileged few. Everyone has them everyday, a thousands times a day. What separates the dreamers from the doers is action.
For writers that means, butt in the chair, goals and deadlines. And a lot of self discipline. A lot.
Sorry, folks. No great secret here. Just basic stuff. Which is both good and bad. Good because, Hey! It’s not rocket science; anybody can do this.
Bad because, Hey! It’s not rocket science; anybody can do this.
In the end, we may have no good excuses to offer. Just the sad fact that we choose not to act, not to follow through, not to follow that dream.
Take a risk. Write your story. Explore your creativity, however it comes to you. Don’t let the constraints of time hold you back. The time is going to past whether you do it or not. I’d rather look back and say, yeah, I did it.
Wouldn’t you?
Keep writing, keep believing and keep in touch.
Desiree

How NOT to Respond to a Bad Review

Today I set up a Twitter account. Mostly because I wanted to follow my daughter (17) but the minute she found out, she made me “unfollow” her. Her exact words were, “That’s creepy, Mom. Stop following me.”

So I did. The point of all of this is to show how I found out about a new e-book called The Greek Seaman, by Jacqueline Howett. While on the Twitter site, someone tweeted something about an author (Ms. Howett)  having a “meltdown” over a bad review. Never one to speed by a car wreck, I checked it out.

Wow. The author of that tweet was being nice. Meltdown? I’d say a full-blown fit.

BigAl’s Books and Pals is a blog dedicated to book reviews. Specifically,

“Book reviews, news, commentary, and other fun stuff for readers and authors with an emphasis on the Kindle world and independent authors.”
 
This is a direct quote from his About page. As of today, BigAl’s Books has 145 FaceBook fans, and 216 Twitter followers. Pretty small numbers comparatively speaking. He has reviewed a lot of books though, so I assume author’s seek him out, send in their submissions, cross their fingers, and hope for a good review.
  
So what’s an author to do if that review is, well, not so good? I’ve heard from many seasoned writers that the best course of action is to ignore it. I’ve even heard authors say to not read ANY of your reviews. “It messes with your head,”  they say.  “The good ones and the bad ones.”  By reading J. Howett’s comments following BigAl’s review, I can definitely say that, yeah, that review really messed with her head.
 
BigAl begins his review with a compliment. The book was “compelling and interesting.” But then he follows up by saying that the chances of someone making it to the end of the book are “pretty slim.” Why? The spelling and grammar errors. He states that there are so many of them it makes it difficult to get into the book. Readers are jarred into reality by Ms. Howett’s many errors. Ouch!
 
These comments hit home for me because, quite frankly, my grammar sucks. But I know that. I’m never shock when someone tells me they found a mistake. I quickly correct it, and then I thank them.
Ms. Howett’s response was swift and petty. I have to wonder if this is the first time anyone has told her she needs the help of an editor.
 
Her first comment to the reviewer states that HE read the wrong copy of the manuscript (in other words, It’s your fault). She then goes on to copy and past a few 4 and 5 star reviews from Amazon; which are soon discredited and called fakes by one of the  300 or so comments that followed her internet temper tantrum. (The post went up at 8am. By 6pm there were over 300 comments. Most of them–didn’t read them all–were not favorable to the author.)
 
The ones I did read stated that they would not buy the book because the author was acting like a child and was “very unprofessional.”  Double ouch!
And, no one was  talking about the book. No one was talking about the characters or the plot. They were all talking about the writer and her over-the-top reaction.
 
Ms. Howett took a bad situation and made it badder. (I know . . . couldn’t resist.)
So, what’s a writer to do?
 
While getting a bad review would not make the reviewer a bully, I would say that the best thing to do would be to follow the advice our parents gave us about school yard bullies. Ignore them. Say nothing. So instead of 300+ negative comments, tweets turning her “meltdown” into entertainment, and bloggers like me spreading the word, the review would have come and gone, without anyone really noticing. 
 
This is really sad. We all know how much energy and time it takes to write a novel.  I truly hope this author can recover from this sad fiasco. In addition to an editor, she should seriously consider hiring a publicist One that specializes in damage control.
 
Or in her second book, she could try this.
Have you ever received a negative review? How did you handle it? (Please, no confessions of anything illegal.)

Let’s Write!

So we meet at last . . .
RWwrites is the blog for Rose Writers Workshop. I began these creative writing workshops in 2008 and have been going strong ever since. Recently, I became an official Amherst Writers & Artists (AWA) Affiliate which means I follow the AWA method in all my workshops– a wonderful and successful method that builds creative and confident artists.
Way back in the 1980s, a wonderful writer and poet named Pat Schneider began working with women from low-income and underserved populations. She designed her workshops to be nonhierachical, safe and supportive. Under Mrs. Schneider’s gentle guidance, writers learned how to unearth and honor their true voices. She named it the Amherst Writers & Artists and has been working with and training others to use the method in their own communities.
What a wonderful gift, and I have seen it work myself in the many workshops I have led.

This blog is dedicated to the many writers who have honored me with their presence in my workshops. It is also for writers and artist everywhere who can enjoy a good story, and maybe looking for new and diverse writing prompts.

Thanks for stopping by and check back soon!

Desiree